Yes I did.
smiles...i love the implied intimacy of those last lines....what a morning eh? i like too how you let us see/hear all that is going on around before you get there...
quite & matter-of-fact... in a superbly poetic way - i love it
You set the scene wonderfully. Beautifully expressed.
"at the earliest hour he laid his hand upon her hip"I love the subtle shift here, the embedded possibilities only hinted at.
Tis a gorgeous write.
Love the addition of the vision of his laying his hand upon her hip. Very nice indeed.Pamela
Very tender, soft, and delicious.
I like how the first two stanzas set the scene for the romance evoked in the third. Simplicity is often what works best!
Simple, quiet and lovely.
A beautiful ending. You made me feel all warm and cosy.
I love the sense of sound - what one hears while wrapped in an intimate moment - the immediacy of this poem ... nicely done!
smiles...and the rest of the story is left to our fantasy...smiles... i like
tender and evocative..
present and intimate - gorgeous ~ M
Deep peace of the running wave to you.Deep peace of the flowing air to you.Deep peace of the quiet earth to you.Deep peace of the shining stars to you.Deep peace of the gentle night to you.Moon and stars pour their healing light on you