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Saturday, 7 September 2013

7 September


Billy


they gathered to celebrate 
no longer tethered to this earthly life
he had worn his crown well
it was  tattered and torn
was he in a loft above them -he would have scoffed







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13 comments:

  1. Very nice....'were' also fits well instead of 'was' perhaps..

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    1. It reads as a different meaning to me. Were sounds like if her were there he would be scoffing. Was is more of him scoffing at the idea that there even is a loft above them.

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  2. no longer tethered to his earthly life - beautiful words! Loved the entry.

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  3. Lovely words - no longer tethered to his earthly life...

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  4. Think you need to use the exact word i.e 'tether' not 'tethered'. Sorry for being a pain!

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  5. The crown was tethered and torn. Poor person . nice read.

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  6. I liked the 'no longer tethered to this earthly life' line, too. It is both liberating, and sad at the same time.

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  7. Tethered to his earthly life... great use ..

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  8. That scoff raises questions! I wonder why he would react in such a way? Is he amused? Disappointed? I like the bit of mystery behind it.
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